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Monica A Leyva's avatar

There is a quiet strength in how you hold this moment. The stillness between Baasim and his mentor carries more weight than the dialogue itself. You allow the reader to feel the threshold before it is crossed, and that restraint makes the reflection land even deeper.

Eliseo F.G. McCarthy's avatar

The human tension here was a good challenge to make, I'm so glad it worked out!

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Definitely did

HVR's avatar

The purpose to fight? I like it. I think of my purpose for anything. I feel a little better after.

Amy Ouyang's avatar

This piece feels like a beautifully-written high fantasy novel. You have amazing world-building!

Eliseo F.G. McCarthy's avatar

Thank you so much!

Most of the novel is fairly gritty, so this being towards the middle of the book will probably provide some relief.

Amy Ouyang's avatar

Ooo so cool! Interspersing lighter moments like these throughout your novel is a great idea , strikes a good balance! Great job 👏

Amy Ouyang's avatar

Great article!!

Zephyr Mezmeron's avatar

Ooh, this is beautifully arcane; you can feel the magick in it. Looking forward to more...

Eliseo F.G. McCarthy's avatar

Thank you, I'm glad you're interested in it!

I wrote various flash fictions to use as flashbacks in the novel, and I'll be posting more of them here, so keep the frequency!

Zephyr Mezmeron's avatar

Marvelous! I'll keep an eye on my inbox!

Eliseo F.G. McCarthy's avatar

Just so you know, I'm doing a new schedule for my releases where very Wednesday I realse something, next week is a poem, and two weeks after that is the next snippet.

I do appreciate the enthusiasm, it really means a lot to me!

Zephyr Mezmeron's avatar

Ooh, I really like the idea of a set schedule like that. That’s classy. I’ve been doing a post a day roughly while I get my backlog up but I should commit to a schedule of some sort as well—thanks for the inspiration. Looking forward to the poem!

Eliseo F.G. McCarthy's avatar

So far the schedule helps me get a bit more organized and saves time for other things, its pretty nifty!

Monica A Leyva's avatar

From a distance, everything looks peaceful. Closer, we know better. This piece understands both at once.

Amy Ouyang's avatar

Great article!